USC’s Advanced Editing

556 - Class Notes 3/13/08

Where is it working and why? Where is it not working and why?

Initial reactions:

• How do we feel about Mikey?
  • Taking out of the lesbian sex line – some people like Mikey more with line out – some people miss the line
  • Feel less attached to Mikey this time
  • Keeping all jokes in makes Mikey one dimensional — and we don’t believe that he could be Oona’s one.
  • How do you deal with contradictory comments/feedback?
    • Go back to script and check in.
      • Still Oona’s story? YES
• Getting to know Steph better in this cut and like her more
• Scene R120 – Oona/Steph make up - what would the scene be like if we take lines out about Mikey
• Timer
  • If we can remove some of the steps with the Timer – no big beeping when you zero out – beeps when you lock eyes with your “one”
  • Lots of different beeps right now - even with same beeps it will be confusing
  • Need to simplify
  • Concept of zeroing out is there and integral to the film
  • Rules of timer are a little confusing still
    • What are the rules we want to say? The simpler the better
    • Time zeros out on the day you are going to meet them and beeps when you see them
    • The focus is on when you meet them we are not going to play up the zero out The big moment we are going for is the meeting
    • Need to make eye contact for the timer to start beeping
    • Need to design a different sound for timer turning on vs timer connecting
• J115 – Dan is the One – need them to look at each other
  • Oona is playing the end of scene at beginning – she is ahead of the plot
• Timer inserts hold them long enough for us to help tell the story